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#1 ShadowGTR

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Posted March 21 2013 - 09:12 AM

Inspired by my recent participation in the BSB tournament a few weeks ago and the "A Windy Day on Illal" thread, I decided to write up my own short story! It is called..."The Tournament".

I may have taken a few liberties with some of the lore surrounding the game, so let this be a warning to any hardcore fans of the Hawken lore. If I don't follow the rules of the Hawken lore universe, I did it not out of disrespect for the material, but for artistic reasons.

Hopefully I caught most of the typos and kept the tense correct. :rolleyes: Due to it's length, I decided to place it in GoogleDocs rather than post it here. Let me know what you think, and constructive feedback is appreciated!


Enjoy! B)

https://docs.google....dit?usp=sharing

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Posted March 21 2013 - 09:42 AM

This is great ShadowGTR very descriptive and nicely written.
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Posted March 21 2013 - 09:57 AM

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Posted March 21 2013 - 02:37 PM

Awesome read! Love the hawken community and what they can create!


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Posted March 21 2013 - 05:37 PM

Damn... I need to get started back on my fanfiction tonight. I have been holding it off too long. I pretty much scrolled through it but I can see it was nicely written. :)
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#6 ShadowGTR

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Posted March 22 2013 - 07:09 AM

Everyone: Thanks for the feedback! Glad to see that my story is being appreciated! ^_^

View Posttman7919, on March 21 2013 - 05:37 PM, said:

Damn... I need to get started back on my fanfiction tonight. I have been holding it off too long. I pretty much scrolled through it but I can see it was nicely written. :)

Yeah, be sure to finish up that fan fiction you've been working on. You've mentioned it a few times now on the forums. I'd love to see it once it's completed!

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Posted March 22 2013 - 11:49 AM

Excellently well written, and the realistic reasons for certain features and bugs are great. I wouldn't mind reading more, if you are to continue.

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Posted March 22 2013 - 12:53 PM

View PostRudaForce, on March 22 2013 - 11:49 AM, said:

Excellently well written, and the realistic reasons for certain features and bugs are great. I wouldn't mind reading more, if you are to continue.

Thanks, I glad you enjoyed it! :D

I am very strongly considering writing up some more short stories. No sooner had I finished this one, than I got some inspiration for the start of another one. However, this new one, if I do write it up, would be separate from "The Tournament". I meant for "The Tournament" to be its own moment in time (a snapshot, if you will), isolated from other events and stories going on. Of course, I would maintain most of the logic that I used in "The Tournament" (functionality, bug explanations, etc) - at least until the devs make a change that requires me to alter said logic. ;)

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Posted March 22 2013 - 01:13 PM

And to think that my thread started this sort of masterpiece!
Amazing work.

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Posted March 27 2013 - 04:53 PM

Mind if I linked this thread to this one?
https://community.pl...33-war-stories/

P.S.: The thread is essentially to act as a hub for these kinds of stories.

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#11 ShadowGTR

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Posted March 27 2013 - 09:45 PM

View PostFrouste, on March 27 2013 - 04:53 PM, said:

Mind if I linked this thread to this one?
https://community.pl...33-war-stories/

P.S.: The thread is essentially to act as a hub for these kinds of stories.

I don't mind at all! Anything to help get some more good Hawken stories on this site. :)

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Posted March 28 2013 - 12:27 PM

I'm thinking of making a post about the development of a mech to expensive to put on the front lines, or manufacture in high amounts, not sure if people would like it though... (It's also missing a primary weapon)

Good story.

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