Fixes: (Stuff added) I speed the intro up a bit, remove the last music, and i added base to the intro.
Compare these 2 and tell me which one is better.
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Hawken Intro (FIXED)
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GhostMechT
, Aug 09 2014 12:50 PM
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Posted August 09 2014 - 01:00 PM
Personally, I prefer intros that are under 10 seconds, but this is a marked improvement.
[HWK]HUGHES, on July 03 2013 - 11:07 PM, said:
AJK is right
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Posted August 09 2014 - 01:05 PM
My suggestion, make that text box in the beginning look more professional. I don't know how but it looks... Out of place. (Imho)
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Posted August 09 2014 - 01:16 PM
Good work man, I know its just an AE template but that is still good work. Keep it coming dude! Lets see more, because you have to start somewhere...
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Posted August 09 2014 - 01:48 PM
Infyrno, on August 09 2014 - 01:05 PM, said:
My suggestion, make that text box in the beginning look more professional. I don't know how but it looks... Out of place. (Imho)
Pastorius, on August 09 2014 - 01:16 PM, said:
Good work man, I know its just an AE template but that is still good work. Keep it coming dude! Lets see more, because you have to start somewhere...
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Posted August 09 2014 - 01:51 PM
Better, but fix the typo.
You have "www.playhakwen.com" at the beginning of the video...
You have "www.playhakwen.com" at the beginning of the video...
Edited by _incitatus, August 09 2014 - 01:52 PM.
[HWK]ZamboniChaos, on April 23 2014 - 11:13 AM, said:
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Posted August 09 2014 - 02:01 PM
I think it'd function better without the first half.
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Posted August 09 2014 - 02:58 PM
Likes the effort, but intros should be like vines, pretty short, cuz they're the intros, not the content that should be long. 
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Posted August 09 2014 - 03:48 PM
_incitatus, on August 09 2014 - 01:51 PM, said:
Better, but fix the typo.
You have "www.playhakwen.com" at the beginning of the video...
You have "www.playhakwen.com" at the beginning of the video...
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Posted August 09 2014 - 04:23 PM
k and w are switched
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Posted August 09 2014 - 05:44 PM
Nept, on August 09 2014 - 04:23 PM, said:
k and w are switched
This.
It's only at the very beginning. It's correct through the rest of the vid.
[HWK]ZamboniChaos, on April 23 2014 - 11:13 AM, said:
You are the undisputed champion of camouflages.
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Posted August 10 2014 - 06:46 AM
yup. dyslexic intro.
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